Favorite Place (revise II)

My favorite place is my hometown, Amakusa. I want to introduce you there.

When I come back there, I relax and feel warm. I love the time having dinner with my family. My family talks a lot, and funny. I don’t have TV in my room in Kumamoto (I watch TV program on my computer.), so I’m grad to watch TV at home. My family bought big one, and they record my favorite TV program. I enjoy them.

Foods are good, too! We can get flesh fish and vegetable, in Amakusa, and my mother is a good chef. (Though, sometimes she fails…) While I stay my home, my mother cooks my favorite food tempura or curry and rice. My family has fields to grow oranges; I like them, very much. Decopom Oranges in Amakusa are famous. I like its jam my grand-pa makes. In Kumamoto, I really miss them.

Near my house, it is peaceful, and has a lot of nature. I often enjoy taking a walk. In my home, there is a batting machine which my dad remade a toy one. It is nice. Atmosphere is also clear, and we can see many star. When I backed to home from high school, I always looked up stars and sang on my bike. Amakusa is famous for beautiful beach. I’m sorry that my house isn’t near the beach, but I go there to enjoy at least one time a year. My grand-pa and my dad like fishing. I often used to do fishing and gather shellfish in my childhood.

Some old my friends live in Amakusa, and other come back in their vacations. Of cause it is attractiveness for me

There are many things I love in Amakusa. They make me happy and cheer me up. After I left home, I found that. (304 words)

Favorite places (revise)

I have two favorite places.One of them is Tokyo Disney Land. Although I had visited there just one time, I love there. I felt to be in the dream, and I had fun like children in there. Not only I, but also my friends and other did. All who visit in TDL smile and enjoyed, they looked happy! I think it is wonderful! I had been some parks, but I had never been such a park. In almost parks I had gone, some looked to be tired, and felt bad against fallen trashes and people offending moral. However, TDL was clean anywhere, and there are many attractions adult also enjoy. By the way I like space mountain☆ It was so exciting.

The staff was great, too. Every staff smiled anytime, and be friendly. Their costumes were cute. Additionally foods are cute. I had an ice-cream with cookies like Mickey. I did felt Disney Land is just dream land☆ The park gave me happiness and dream.Next, another my favorite place. It is my home town, Amakusa. When I come back there, I relax and feel warm. I love the time having dinner with my family. My family talks a lot, and funny. Foods are good, too! We can get flesh fish and vegetable, in Amakusa, and my mother is a good chef. (Though, sometimes she fails…) My family grows oranges, I like it very mush.

In Kumamoto, I really miss them. Near my house, it is peaceful, and has a lot of nature. I often enjoy taking a walk. In my home, there is a batting machine which my dad remade a toy one. It is nice.

Atmosphere is also clear, and we can see many star. When I backed to home from high school, I always looked up stars and sang on my bike.

Amakusa is famous for beautiful beach. I’m sorry that my house isn’t near the beach, but I go there to enjoy at least one time a year. My grand-pa and my dad like fishing. I often used to do fishing and gather shellfish in my childhood. Amakusa have attractive place more, like Christen building.

Some old my friends live in Amakusa, and other come back in their vacations. Of cause it is attractiveness for me.


I need both place, and I would like to go soon. (394 words)

Favorite Places

I have two favorite places.

One of them is Tokyo Disney Land. Although I had visited there just one time, I love there. I felt to be in the dream, and I had fun like children in there. Not only I, but also my friends and other did. All who visit in TDL smile and enjoyed, they looked happy! I think it is wonderful! I had been some parks, but I had never been such a park. In almost parks I had gone, some looked to be tired, and felt bad against fallen trashes and people offending moral. However, TDL was clean anywhere, and there are many attractions adult also enjoy. The staff was great, too. Every staff smiled anytime, and be friendly. Their costumes were cute. I did felt Disney Land is just dream land☆ The park gave me happiness and dream.

Next, another my favorite place. It is my home town, Amakusa. When I come back there, I relax and feel warm. I love the time having dinner with my family. My family talks a lot, and funny. Foods are good, too! We can get flesh fish and vegetable, in Amakusa, and my mother is a good chef. (Though, sometimes she fails…) My family grows oranges, I like it very mush. In Kumamoto, I really miss them. Near my house, it is peaceful, and has a lot of nature. I often enjoy taking a walk. In my home, there is a batting machine which my dad remade a toy one. It is nice. Atmosphere is also clear, and we can see many star. When I backed to home from high school, I always looked up stars and sang on my bike. Amakusa is famous for beautiful beach. I’m sorry that my house isn’t near the beach, but I go there to enjoy at least one time a year. My grand-pa and my dad like fishing. I often used to do fishing and gather shellfish in my childhood. Some old my friends live in Amakusa, and other come back in their vacations. Of cause it is attractiveness for me.

I need both place, and I would like to go soon.(362 words)

Favorite Place; outline

-Disney Land
▼dream

• childly

　 ▼attractive

• fun
• enjoy
• happy

▼hospitality

• clean
• smile
• peaceful
• cute

-Amakusa
▼family

• soothe
• home made
• slowlife
• love
• butting

▼nature

• sky
• stars
• sea
• tree
• take a walk

▼friends
▼foods

• fish
• orange
• vegetable

Favorite Place; brainstorms

Disney Land

• dream
• fun
• enjoy
  
• smile
• hospitality
• childly
• happy
• attractive
• cute
• clean
• free
• peaceful

Amakusa

• family
• soothe
• sky
  
• sea
• tree
• fish
• orange
• vegetable
• home made
• take a walk
• friends
• slow life